Dante Takai

[dantetakai]

Dante Takai

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[/b]:male
Age: 10
Starting City: Fairburn town
Occupation: Trainer
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Appearance

[/b]: -- 4’5
Weight: --75
Hair Color: -- light black
Eye Color: -- brown
Skin Tone: -- tanned white
Clothing: Shirt is a black with flames at the bottom of the sleeves. The pants are jeans and his shoes are black sneakers.
Markings: [/ul]none
Personality

[/i][/b][/ul] Dante is very shy. He only plays with his pokemon ans has never even trained with them. But he wants to be a champion one day. So he decided to take the pokemon challenge. He loves his eevee very much. And cares for it to the point of not getting any sleep if it ever got sick. he never puts it in a pokeball because its like a close friend and not a pet anymore. he and eevee have tried to train but because of there playful nature they always ended up playing instead.
Inventory

• 5 Pokeballs
  
• 3 potions
  
• 1 full heal
  
• pokedex.
  
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Starting Pokemon

History

[/blockquote] Dante was born in Fairborn town and has stayed there ever since at the age of 5 he was introduced to his fathers pokemon.
A former champion before he was beaten, dantes father was well know. But, during a venture to capture a rare pokemon his father disappeared off the face of the earth. After a year of searching they gave up. After thast, dante refused to have anything to do with pokemon. But, as its been proven before, pokemon training runs in the blood. At the age of seven, dante was out for walk. When he heard a welp and rabn toward it. What he found was a Eevee who was badly hurt. Thinking out of instinct. He grabbed the eevee and ran to the nearby pokemon research lab and after a few days the eevee was healed.
It was during that time that dante never left the eevees side and he developed a bond with the eevee. The eevee felt the same and when ADante let it go back into the wild, it didn’t leave. So he desided to take it in as a pet. Once iot was his pet he named it, (after finding out its gender, which was female.) its name was Ai. And for the next 3 years they played together. But then when Dante heard that his closest friend and rival had started his pokemon journey he desided it was time to start his as well.
(a side note) his father, a former champion by the name of Morning "Ray" Takai, went mission when he went to the Jhoto region to hunt down celbi. Celibi transported him threw time before he could catch him. he ended up i n the present. when he tried to get to his house. he saw an eevee and wanted it but when he was about to throw the ball his son. now older, appeared threw the trees. he hide and because of this incident Dante and Ai met.
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[Hotaru]

Could you expand your history and personality? They are pretty lacking.

Also, separate your history into paragraphs. It's easier to read.

[dantetakai]

okay i fixed it

[Δ ROYAL]

Expand your personality and history further. You can elaborate more, I know you can. I'm not askin' for much but supply a little bit more than you are now.

[dantetakai]

okay!

[Δ ROYAL]

The reference to Celebi in the history isn't really going to fly, perhaps change it to a non-legendary but rare type of Pokemon?

Also, I'd go through with Spell Check in order to fix up all the errors that are spread throughout the bio itself.

Regardless, these are things that can be fixed after acceptance so:

Accepted.

[dantetakai]

YAY!!!!